User talk:Franken Kesey/Energy Leech (3.5e Equipment)

What?
What is this? And why is it a weapon when it looks like an overcomplicated spell effect? -- Eiji-kun 02:58, 10 May 2011 (UTC)


 * I agree with Eiji. I've cleaned it up grammatically as best as I could (and please read the section below on 'Grammar 101'), but I still have no fucking clue as to how this is meant to work. If it works like a psionic power, does it allow spell resistance? Is it meant to be a weapon, or what? Is it magical? What gives? - MisterSinister 20:47, 19 June 2011 (UTC)

Grammar 101
Since I see you making certain mistakes over and over again, I thought I'd give you a rundown of basic grammar. So here goes:


 * Any instance of 's does not represent a plural (which is 'more than one of something'). Instead, it indicates possession (which means 'this thing owns the thing written next to it). Thus, if you want to say that there are many energy cells, you write 'energy cells. If you write 'energy cell's', it looks like the single energy cell owns whatever you put after it. If I see another instance of this in your work, I may have to punch you through your monitor.
 * Semicolons are not commas. They are designed to separate a related, but distant idea, which is not distant enough to warrant its own sentence. In general, semicolons shouldn't really be used - they're a grammatical structure that is relatively rarely called-for. In all cases where you used semicolons, you should use commas instead, since you weren't bringing up anything too distant from what you were saying in the main sentence anyway.
 * Link your ideas properly. Compare the second paragraph of your work before my edits and after my edits to see what I mean. It reads much nicer, doesn't it?
 * Capitalization should occur in two instances, and two instances only: when you start a sentence (kinda like I did here), and when you have a proper noun (such as a place name, or a person's name). 'Elder Fire Elemental' is neither. Nor is 'Energy Leech'. Please use these correctly from now on.

Lastly, and most importantly - get an editor. I realise not everyone is a literary genius, but work of this quality (or lack thereof) shouldn't even be posted. - MisterSinister 20:47, 19 June 2011 (UTC)