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== Trying to help ==

So normally I just slap on an incomplete so it won't get lost in the ether, and leave it at that, but I feel the need to do some constructive criticism.  It applies to both this page and in general.

So even if you had the tags and everything (which to this day you ''still'' delete... why do you keep doing that when you know better?) it would still be a problem.  Here, take a look at any other sourcebook page (which is this presumably meant to be for) or even just take a look at campaign setting things in wizards books, like what you see in say, Elder Evils.

See how different they look?  How complete they are?  Your goal is to look and be formatted like that.

Pages are supposed to have formatting and depth.  This is more the scribbled notes of someone in a notepad.  Beyond formatting, there isn't really content here.  It's more of a vague hint of an idea, a sidenote of a game you could run.  And even then it suffers from [[Elothar Warrior of Bladereach (3.5e Prestige Class)|Elothar Warrior of Bladereach disease]].  This linked class is a parody making fun of classes which are married to their flavor.  In this case, it's not even "there is a battle between nations and X Y and Z will happen, here is your challenge".  It's "you WILL be strolling".  "You WILL have a friend, and his name is Cortyr."  "He WILL have this backstory and you WILL have an emotional connection to him." even if you don't.  And "THIS WILL HAPPEN" because it is written and thus it is so.

And that is just terrible design.  Slap on the most generic title this side of "Action Guy: Revenge of the Return." and there you go.  I'd rate it down, but it's simply not ''complete'' enough to rate at all. -- [[User:Eiji-kun|Eiji-kun]] ([[User talk:Eiji-kun|talk]]) 05:29, 5 May 2016 (UTC)


: the reason why I Removed the WILL is because it sounds odd and it will keep people from messing up the story take for example my adventure I am currently DMing. So one day after we got a bronze dragon wyrmlings diamond back to him Nero Blackraven (our teams annoying Ranger) said he wanted to secretly kill him for the gem and it's worth . With everybody wanting to stealth sabotage like the annoying people they are

::I just want to know why this is called the War of Revenge when 1. There's a battle, not a war and 2. Revenge is never mentioned. Axe Cop makes more sense than this, and it's written by a 6-year-old. [[User:Spanambula|Spanambula]] ([[User talk:Spanambula|talk]]) 23:57, 5 May 2016 (UTC)

::: I have not written down yet the full story [[User:XX the memenist Xx|XX the memenist Xx]] ([[User talk:XX the memenist Xx|talk]]) 21:08, 6 May 2016 (UTC)

::::You need to re-add the tags (3.5e Quest) and finish it. Otherwise move it to a sandbox under your user name (User:Xx the memenist Xx/The War of Revenge). If that's not done, I'll have to put an incomplete on it. [[User:Surgo|Surgo]] ([[User talk:Surgo|talk]]) 22:41, 6 May 2016 (UTC)

::::: Look this is not a 3.5e Quest this is a 5e quest and if everybody is going to slap an incomplete on it when I say it is still in the works  then why don't you go bother someone else [[User:XX the memenist Xx|XX the memenist Xx]] ([[User talk:XX the memenist Xx|talk]]) 15:51, 7 May 2016 (UTC)

:::::: All articles get the incomplete template slapped on 'em until they're complete. It's fine if it's still in the works, but if you want to work on it long-term before having it up for criticism, I'd recommend sandboxing it until it's ready. --[[User:Ghostwheel|Ghostwheel]] ([[User talk:Ghostwheel|talk]]) 16:11, 7 May 2016 (UTC)

::::::: How do you do that ? [[User:XX the memenist Xx|XX the memenist Xx]] ([[User talk:XX the memenist Xx|talk]]) 17:51, 7 May 2016 (UTC)