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| − | Please note that "Tweeking" means I'm done, just saying "Oh, this sentence sounds better like this" or "It's clearer when written like this" | + | Please note that "Tweeking" means I'm done, it just means that I am saying "Oh, this sentence sounds better like this" or "It's clearer when written like this" |
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| | "The difference between bravery and stupidity is if the plan works" - Newrok Shadowblade, Saint of Creation in Shadowgate 14:29, August 4, 2010 (UTC) | | "The difference between bravery and stupidity is if the plan works" - Newrok Shadowblade, Saint of Creation in Shadowgate 14:29, August 4, 2010 (UTC) |
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| − | :You really need to differentiate, in the first paragraph, what makes a Darkblade different from a Rogue or Shadowdancer. Then you need to remove any <- and -> that remain in the page, and add in-page links. [[User:Surgo|Surgo]] 15:00, August 4, 2010 (UTC)
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| − | ::Also, a spell-checker. You really, really need to use one. [[User:Surgo|Surgo]] 15:08, August 4, 2010 (UTC)
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| − | Improved Shadowcall's basically an at-will save-or-die with no limitations on use and it's a ranged touch attack. Very wizard-level IMO. Plus, shadowhealing + maximized Hide or invisibility = free full health. Also rather wizard level I think. This really seems all over the place in terms of the power of individual abilities, and the wording doesn't help clarify matters much, but those two are quite powerful especially given that improved Shadowcall is also based on your roll as well instead of fixed DC. - [[User:ThunderGod Cid|TG Cid]] 15:30, August 4, 2010 (UTC)
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| − | :The reason why I gave ''Shadowcall'' a ranged touch attack and a oposing roll was because you first have to be able to "hit" the target, then a force of wills. But now that I think about it, your right. - Dukelzan
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| − | I'm a little confused by "IMO" could you clarify that abbreviation? I've alo never hear of the spell "Hide" (the way your using it) or can you use meatamagic feat with skills in a varient rule I haven't seen?
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| − | "The difference between bravery and stupidity is if the plan works" - Newrok Shadowblade, Saint of Creation in Shadowgate 20:17, August 4, 2010 (UTC)
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| − | :In my opinion. [http://www.acronymfinder.com/IMO.html Maybe]. -- [[User:Jota II|Jota]] 20:20, August 4, 2010 (UTC)
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| − | ::I was referring to the skill, but I meant if you took the maximum amount of ranks possible in that skill. - [[User:ThunderGod Cid|TG Cid]] 20:23, August 4, 2010 (UTC)
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| − | What on earth is "all three ACs"? [[User:Surgo|Surgo]] 20:27, August 4, 2010 (UTC)
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| − | :I just changed that. What I meant was Basic armor class, touch armor class, and flat-footed armor class. -Dukelzan
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| − | == Done? ==
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| − | Okay, I THINK I'm done. Please look it over and give me the heads up.
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| − | "The difference between bravery and stupidity is if the plan works" - Newrok Shadowblade, Saint of Creation in Shadowgate 20:39, August 4, 2010 (UTC)
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| − | :None of the class features say what type they are -- (Sp), (Ex), or (Su). Surely some of them should have a type.
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| − | :At the end of "Hardened Shadows" there is this: "16, part of an indigenous race, home was uprooted by invaders ". Not sure what that's about.
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| − | :Hardened Shadows -- no duration listed.
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| − | :Shadow Domain -- this is very confusing. Do they get the spell slots of a sorcerer of that level, or what? Explain this better.
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| − | :Shadowjump -- "The Darkblade gains a bonus equal to his Darkblade level ". Bonus to ''what''?
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| − | :Shadowhealing -- what type of action is this. How much regeneration and how is it bypassed?
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| − | :Shadowblow -- I have no idea what this is supposed to do; this ability makes no sense.
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| − | :Improved Shadowcall -- what is the "spontaneous conversion" rule?
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| − | :Aside from all this, you need more spellchecking. I want you to actually '''read''' through every last word you wrote. Read it out loud. If you do this, it will be pretty clear what doesn't make any sense or where the bad grammar is. [[User:Surgo|Surgo]] 20:47, August 4, 2010 (UTC)
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| − | ::Okay, I fixed the errors that you pointed out. I may have labeled the powers a little off, but that was because I thought the powers are from a source of extraordinary power. I believe I caught most of the grammar errors too. Pleas look again. Please and thank you. Sorry about the “16, part of an indigenous race, home was uprooted by invaders” thing. I was checking spelling on a word document I had already used. - Dukelzan
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